UFS 211: EDITING & REVISING "SYNOPSIS OF MOVIE"

Based on the movie that I watched called ‘Harry Potter and the Prisoner of Azkaban”, of course this movie story is about magic. A boy called Harry Potter is the chosen one from the evil witches called Lord Voldermort. Lord Voldermort has transferred half of his power to the boy, and Harry is famous in the world of witches. In this story, it is about a prisoner that escaped from the jail, and it called Azkaban. Series Black is one of the prisoners that has escaped, and been telling that he is one of the followers of Lord Voldermort which is the reason Harry’s parents dead because of him, but unfortunately, Series Black is friends of Harry’s father, and his Godfather. Series Black is the only family left to Harry. However, if I’m experiencing the same situation, of course, I will find the killer of my parents, and I will take revenge just like Harry does in the movie. But if I’m become like Harry, I will investigate more information about Series Black or asking some person that know about him. With the power that I have, I will improve my power so that I’m ready to face him. But unfortunately, Series Black is my godfather, there will be no more revenge to him, and all I do is keep searching who is Voldermort, and find a way how to kill him with my power that he left inside me.

UFS 211: THE NARRATIVE PARAGRAPH "PARAGRAPH WRITING"

Topic	The food that I like
Topic Sentences	Cheesecake is my favorite food.
Supporting Details	a)      My favorite desserts that made in fresh cheese. b)      It maybe can be classified as unhealthy. c)       Cheesecakes nutrition’s.
Conclusion	Cheesecake is a delicious dessert I ever tasted.
Linkers/Sequence Connectors used	However, moreover, therefore

Paragraph:

                My favorite food is cheesecake. Cheesecake is the most favorite desserts I ever tasted and almost every day I’m going to bakery and buy a slice of cheesecake. Cheesecake is the most delicious desserts that been suggest by many people. Cheesecake usually been added with strawberry, chocolates, lemon and lots of fruits was added while making a cheesecake. However, it made in a fresh cheese. Sometimes, cheesecakes sweetened with sugar and may be flavored or top with fruits. This food may be contained unhealthy food because it contains of 20g of fats, 45mg cholesterol, 260 of calories, and 8mg of saturated fat. Moreover, it contains 4g of protein, and 20g of carbohydrates. Therefore, cheesecakes are a favorite food for everyone; the most important thing is, when we eating the cheesecake, we can taste the real cheese inside it.

Topic	Plagiarism among college students.
Topic Sentences	A rising tactics among students college.
Supporting Details	a)      Always been used by some students to cheat and some of them want to get a higher marked. b)      Laziness to think and make their own decision while doing their assignment. c)       Hard to find the right point.
Conclusion	Plagiarism is not allowed because it will teach you how to cheat.
Linkers/Sequence Connectors used	However, sometimes

Paragraph:

                Plagiarism among college students is getting higher. This situation happened when a student cannot make their own assignment that been given by their lecturer. However, this short cut work always been using with almost students in college. Sometimes, among students using plagiarism to cheat and want to get higher marks for their assignments. If these students keep continuing using a plagiarism in their whole life, their laziness will become lazier than ever. Moreover, some students are kindly confused to make decision their assignment. Some of them afraid to find the wrong point while searching info from internet, to avoid it happened; they just copy and paste all the points from internet and any sources. They also having a problem to find the right points and that make them using plagiarism. However, plagiarism is not allowed among us because it will teach us to cheat.

UFS 211: MECHANICS/GRAMMAR "MISTAKE IN ENGLISH WRITING"

In writing, I found myself having a problem to arrange those words to become perfect words with perfect grammars, which is the common mistake that I always do in writing. To me, writing in English is not so hard, but, arrange the words with using the right grammar is the problems to me. The first thing problems that I’m facing before use grammar, “How can I use grammar in my writing?” Second is what I’m going to write in my writing process? If I’m using the wrong grammar, I will lose lots of marks. I’m confident about what I’m writing, but when my results came out, its shows me how weak my grammar is. Sometimes, I cannot find the right grammar or the right words to start a good writing, but there is some suggestion that to improve my writing, I have to read lots of any articles or any newspapers. The dictionary is the important role to upgrading my writing. Meanwhile, learn using an English language with friends is the best way to improve my writing, and slowly I can upgrade my grammar in writing. Otherwise, always try to search something in English. For instance, find some information using English language. 

UFS 211: WRITING A PARAGRAPH "WATER POLLUTION"

Water pollution caused by throwing a large amount of rubbish inside the river or sea. Nowadays, this water pollution can be found in everywhere. Human is the one to blame because we do not care too much about our environment. Water is everything to us. However, water pollution is happen in so many ways. It’s not sewage or waste water is the only reason it change to a pollution, but industrial waste, radioactive waste oil pollution, underground storages leakages, atmospheric deposition, global warming and eutrophication also the reason why the water pollution. Meanwhile, the water pollution is spread almost around the world, it brings a dangerous situation to us, and it’s our healthy. Some company that produce drink water, did not produce it very well. One step mistake will bring us to the dead. If we drink water that do not been approved by any government, we will get disease. There is a way to prevent this water pollution continuing. Be careful of what we throw in our sink, make sure it cleaned.  Otherwise, do not throw litter into the rivers, if we see any litters in the sea, help clean it up, make it safe to collect the litter and put it in a nearby dustbin.

UFS 211: INTRODUCTION OF A PARAGRAPH "WRITING PROCESS WITH TOPIC SENTENCES, SUPPORTING SENTENCES & CONCLUDING SENTENCES"

In my opinion about writing process is can be divided into some stages. Started from topic sentences, follow with supporting sentences and lastly concluding sentences. For topic sentence, it must start by using the main point. For example, “Write about your favorite movie”. So, the title should be “My favorite movie”. Then keep using the three supporting sentences. For example, “Battleship movie is the best. It is lots of fun. By this movie, maybe I can create a new idea about trying to make a film”. After that, write more details for every each of the three reasons. For instance, “Battleship movie is the best; it gives us more ideas and how creative we are while produce a movie. It lots of fun, and it’s suitable for family’s entertainment. Through this movie, it helps us to think how creative this movie was made”. After that, continue with concluding sentence. For example, “I will says that Battleship movie is super cool that I ever seen”.

UFS 211: PROCESS WRITING "WRITING PROCESS"

In my own words about writing process, writing process divided into 5 stages, prewriting, drafting, revising, editing, and publishing. Prewriting is what we need to do before starting our writing. Brainstorming is the best example to pop out your ideas as possible. It can help us decided what are we going to write about. Think before writing something. Think who is going to read what you write, or how much time you spent? The second stages are drafting. Once you have the ideas and the information that you need, start writing. The goal of drafting is to write everything. Just think about the ideas and start writing. The third stage is revising. After writing all the information, make sure you write everything want are you going to write. The next stage is editing. After finished revising and you satisfied with what you have written, make another check. Make sure you check all the grammars, capitalization and punctuation. The last stage is publishing. After you finished with your writing, prepare another final draft. For example, make sure you use only one font so that the others van read it clearly. 

UFS 211: SENTENCE STRUCTURE "Simple, Compound, Complex, compound-Complex Sentence"

- Two sentence of:

·         Simple Sentence:-

o   Being an English teacher with a penchant for syntactical complexity, I love to read simple sentences upon getting up and before going to bed.

o   Mary and Samantha arrived at the bus station before noon and left on the bus before I arrived.

·         Compound Sentence:-

o   I look for Latif and Cris at the bus station, but they arrived at the station before noon and left on the bus before I arrived.

o   Latif and Cris left on the bus before I arrived, so I did not see them at the bus station.

·         Complex Sentence:-

o   While he waited at the train station, Joe realized that the train was late.

o   I did not see them at the station because Mary and Samantha arrived at the bus station before noon.

·         Compound-complex Sentence:-

o   Because I am an English teacher, some people expect me to speak perfectly, and other people expect me to write perfectly.

o   Some people tell me that my grading is too tough, and others tell me that my assignments are boring.